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  1. Gockie

    Gockie Life is good ☺️ Premium Member

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    So I don't make everybody bored in another thread (2017 resolutions), I'm posting stuff here. Thanks for feedback... This will be used in Seek and Linked in and in my CV, Seek limits the summary to 700 characters.

    @geoffw - with your suggestion of removing the second use of the word "solutions" I still want to include creative, timely and robust in there somewhere.
    Here's that intro as it is now....


    I am an experienced Analyst/Developer with strong problem solving skills to provide quality solutions for your business.

    I possess an ability to resolve complex issues and I enjoy collaborating with people. Expertise includes SQL Server, Excel, SSRS, SSIS, Teradata and VBA for creative & timely solutions.

    I love working with friendly, approachable and knowledgeable people in a supportive environment. By nature I have a relaxed personality but I love to rise to a challenge. Solving problems and delivering quaility outcomes for your business will make my day.

    With professional experience since 2003, I am dedicated to self improvement and I seek mentoring and feedback to improve myself.
     
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    geoffw Moderator Staff Member

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    Just wondering if 1st sentence of para 2, which is personal skills, belongs more with para 3.

    I am an experienced Analyst/Developer with strong problem solving skills, with expertise including SQL Server, Excel, SSRS, SSIS, Teradata and VBA to provide creative & timely solutions for your business.

    I possess an ability to resolve complex issues and I enjoy collaborating with people. I love working with friendly, approachable and knowledgeable people in a supportive environment. By nature I have a relaxed personality but I love rising to a challenge. Solving problems and delivering quality outcomes for your business will make my day.

    I've changed "to rise" to "rising" to agree with the verb forms used in other places in the para. Ironically "quality" was spelt incorrectly ;-)
     
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    Gockie Life is good ☺️ Premium Member

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    Hahaha. Cheers Geoff :)
     
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  4. D.T.

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    You've made it fairly well known who your current employer is and your position there. Aren't you worried what they'll think of this?

    I know I wouldn't be happy if my employees went to the Internets instead of coming to me with their intentions.
     
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  5. Gockie

    Gockie Life is good ☺️ Premium Member

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    Lots of analyst jobs at CBA....
     
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  6. kierank

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    My suggestions are:

    1. Change all the 'I' to Linda. This gives the impression that the text was written by an independent professional, not personal.

    2. I would like to see the words "works well without supervision" in there somewhere.

    I need to fill up my empty wine glass before I can come up with any other suggestions.

    Notice my Tagline: Unemployed and Unemployable.

    You may want completely ignore the above :) :).
     
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  7. Gockie

    Gockie Life is good ☺️ Premium Member

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    Cool stuff... Yep, something along the lines of "works well with people but also works well without supervision" is a good amendment. I could say helpful with assisting/coaching/guiding colleagues too but I'd be starting to run out of characters.

    Re changing the I's to Linda.... I think I'll leave that as is.
     
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    kierank Well-Known Member

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    I put this suggestion as my No 1 suggestion for a reason.

    But it is your call.
     
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  9. geoffw

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    In your LinkedIn profile, I'd cut way way back on the volleyball stuff. You have something like four lines of details on your day job, and 20 lines on your volleyball. That's the wrong way around unless you're going for a full time volleyball admin position. Maybe not 20 lines on current but more than what you have; minimum on the volleyball. Airbnb might not be helpful either even if it is just one line. Most people out there aren't supportive of "rich capitalists".

    Somewhere you have "arrive to" which should be "arrive at".
     
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    Cool thanks Geoff.
     
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  11. Gockie

    Gockie Life is good ☺️ Premium Member

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    I am an experienced Analyst/Developer with strong problem solving skills, with expertise including SQL Server, Excel, SSRS, SSIS, Teradata & VBA for creative, robust and timely solutions for your business.

    I possess an ability to resolve complex issues & I enjoy collaborating with people. I love working with friendly, approachable & knowledgeable people in a supportive environment, however I also work well without supervision, and I am more than happy to coach and guide others to achieve results. By nature I have a relaxed personality but I love rising to a challenge. Solving problems & delivering quality outcomes for your business will make my day.

    With professional experience since 2003, I am dedicated to self improvement & I seek mentoring to improve myself.
     
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  12. kierank

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    As the Donald said "You're hired!!!"
     
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    Are you still somewhat over the character limit?
     
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  14. Gockie

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    Probably for Seek.... However have amended the above (incorporating all feedback) and it seems good to me. :D
    Linked In is fine.
     
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    If you're ok for the limit change the ampersands to the word "and". It will look much more professional imo.
     
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    I personally don't like seeing things written in 3rd person unless it was written by a 3rd person - eg LinkedIn Recommendations.

    I just find a person writing about themselves in 3rd person really wanky.

    I also get a chuckle when people write introductions on forums such as this one in 3rd person and the subsequent responses that follow :p
     
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    DT agrees with all of this :p
     
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    IMHO, there is a BIG difference between writing an intro for a wanky forum like PC and a serious platform aimed at getting a job/gaining business leads.

    For the latter, I would always use the third person. Other it sounds wanky if one uses the first person IMHO.
     
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    I don't care if it is first person or third person- as long as it is used consistently. Verb tenses should be consistent throughout. Language should be consistently formal.

    Gockie, you will need to decide what to cut out of your Seek profile anyway, as you are over the limit for that.

    I used to read hundreds of resumes for job assistant positions. Younger people would often use the email address they set up at year 6 or so where as a joke. People wouldn't realise that email addresses like [email protected] or [email protected] don't really cut it for job applications.
     
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  20. Gockie

    Gockie Life is good ☺️ Premium Member

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    The seek version with 700 characters


    I am an experienced Analyst/Developer with strong problem solving skills, with expertise including SQL Server, Excel, SSRS, SSIS, Teradata and VBA to provide robust, creative and timely solutions for your business.

    I possess an ability to resolve complex issues and I love working with friendly, approachable & knowledgeable people, however I'm also capable of working unsupervised & I'm happy to guide others. By nature I have a relaxed personality but I love rising to a challenge. Solving problems and delivering quality outcomes for your business will make my day.

    With professional experience since 2003, I am dedicated to self improvement and I seek mentoring and feedback to improve myself.
     
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